Creative Writing Another peom thing: Wishes

Discussion in 'Written Arts' started by Ashika, Jan 22, 2007.

  1. Ashika

    Ashika This thing is so short...

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    Just another quick one xD


    Wishes

    I wish that you could look at me the way you look at her; wish that you would smile softly when you saw me.

    Wish that you would realize how many years I have loved you; how many months it’s been eating me inside.

    If not you, who else is there? No one else can be you, only themselves. Ill never see them, they would be pawns of comparison.

    Me desperately trying to find you in someone else, to fill this gap where my smile once was. The piece you’ve stolen.

    If someone will just bring back my original laugh, Id know everything was to be alright, and my fears relieved.

    I’ve waited for time to fix my wounds, but they haven’t healed; and my despair when you talk to her stops it from mending.

    Years, months, days, nights, minutes, seconds; all things you have taken from me, all things that I’m not sure I would take back.

    Am I a bad person? Have I done something wrong that I don’t deserve love as a punishment? Or is the curse, that I was just made impossible to love?
     
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  2. Basher

    Basher Mad Writing Skillz

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    It started EMO like but the ending was a nice wrap up. I like it.

    I believe the spelling is good.

    I think this one you put a lot more into it.
     
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