Creative Writing I can't see you.

I can't see you sitting there,
All your fears are all too real.
You cry and you plead as you let go,
But in the end, you can't feel.

You're useless; Pathetic.
You're nothing more then the older set.
As you forget your purpose,
You're feeling real regret.

Can't be perfect anymore?
Alone and tired and barely breathing,
You forget just what you want from me.
Tell me what you're seeing.

Smoke and mirrors,
Constant lies.
Hate and fear,
And my love dies.

This isn't right.


[Blah, it's not great but I felt like I needed to post. <3]

 

I love the last line...

Good work

 

Aww, thanks buddy. =P Like I said, it's not that good tonight but I felt like I was neglecting my writing and a little birdie told me to write. xD

 

Its not your best work.. but its still good. It didnt really wow me... not like most of your work.

 

Yeah, this one really did disappoint me. =/ *sniffles* I'll try harder guys, I swear it! xD

 

E-e-e-e-e-e-mo.

I jest, I jest...

Better than anything I ever came up with. I agree, not your best but.. it's not bad.

 

Have you seen my myspace or what I look like? I exude pure emo into everything. Even my choices of anime are emo at times. =)