Creative Writing Jealousy

Jealousy

If only you can see,
How I’m burning in the flames of jealousy.
Eating away at the flesh of my soul,
So strong its hold,
To break free…seems like an impossible goal.

I’ve been consumed by these envious flames,
And it’s a shame,
How I’ve been caught up in this jealous game…

Only you are to blame,
For making me feel so small,
Causing me to take this fall,
Into the fiery pit of jealousy.
I’m trapped within its walls of captivity,
Driving me to the point of insanity,
Just to find a way out is vanity,
Leading me on the path of calamity.

My mental health is slowly failing,
While this jealousy is prevailing.
These jealous flames devour me,
As I live in hellish misery.

These jealous flames…once a spark so harmless,
Engulfs my life with constant distress,
From coveting your hair, your looks, your life,
Piercing me as a fiery knife.

If only you can see,
How I’m burning in the flames of jealousy.
Torturing me internally,
As these jealous flames burn eternally.


The style is unconventional but, that's how I intended it to be.

 

I found it alright. I thought it was pretty good and I haven't read anything about jealousy before so I thought it was good.

 

Mmm, it's alright as Lance said. Not the best I've seen but nowhere near the worst. Out of ten, it would get a 6.