Creative Writing Runaway

Info: I have my reasons. This is badly done, but hey. At the spur of the moment..
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I ran away
I never wanted to come back
I saw the pain
I felt it over and over again
I ran away, then
back to where I started

I called out your name
I saw you in the back of my head
So clear, so far away
I did it again

I made the heart throb
I made the silence sting
I made you cry those tears
I made the wandering fears

I wanted to run away
I never want to come back here
Back to all the pain
Back to all the tears
I wanted to stay far from this place
So I won't remember all of familiar faces

 

I loved Sakuma-San!!It' was pretty but it could use a little work..but stick with this one and it's still very likeable!

 

Thank you, Seeshy.
You don't really seem to have a lot of negavitity to say. And if you do; I haven't noticed anything. You've gain my respect.

 

*wipes tear from eye* that was.... beautiful sakuma san.. lol...

but really, it was good!

 

wonderful Sakuma-san.
couldn't have done better myself. very very good^_^
i loved it.

 

Hahaha. Very funny. Lol.
Thanks.

Thank you very much. XD

 

so you wrote this at the spur of the moment, though? wow...

 

Yeah. It was quite amusing because I kept correcting myself with errors, and I was typing fast to get my thoughts down before I forget (short term memory...a really bad case of it at that time).

There really isn't much to think about when it comes to creative writting. To me anyways.

 

lol.... for creating writing, it takes me at least a few hours.... well, actually a few seconds. ;P meh. i have short term memory too... can't remember if i ate breakfast or not in the morning, when infact i just ate it a few minutes ago...


i'm scaring myself.

 

Haha. That makes the two of us. I'm freaking out over here about my finished psychology paper. Oooh yeah.

Semantics...Oi vay.

 

ha! that happened to me a couple times too... it's really sad, isn't it....

i think i'm eating too much tofu... they say that if you eat too much of it, your memory becomes really junk. and it's been proven...

 

Woow, we're really getting off topic...

I did not know tofu could do that. You've gotta be kidding right??

 

oh crap, this is like spamming, isn't it...


so um, i'll just say that your poem is really good! again!

but yeah, it was all over the news a few years ago, and all the products are still the same, so if you eat too much of it, (like a helluvalot) you'll be close to getting that... thing. alshimers.. (gyah. can't spell...) but that... thing that makes you have really bad memory...

scary.

but then again, it could be different now.

 

Not bad and I agree it does need work. But that is with everything people write until they like it a certain way. Kind of like a metamorphose maybe a far strech. I like to keep drafts 1, 2, and etc until I feel my work is complete. Keep up the good work.