Creative Writing What you really are.

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  1. Chance

    Chance Admitted Pokemon Fan.

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    Arbitrary genius for almost one hour,
    Sinning like there's no tomorrow.
    I can't imagine what it's like
    To wake up and take a breathe and feel alright.

    It's based on luck and faith and fear,
    Fortune's visage draws ever near.
    My lips brushing it's as I fall,
    Suddenly I knocked face forward into a wall.

    All the pain of realization seems to take its toll.
    And even though you're here with me, you play no role.
    You can't be apart of this, my disillusioned fate.
    This spirit of mine has just been raped.

    I'm going down through this hell of mine,
    Backtracking in the sands of time.
    I can't get out, I'm out of rights.
    Stangle my dreams as you tell me you're fine.

    I don't sleep when you're looking towards me.
    I don't breathe because it's not necessary.
    I'm dead to you and to your words.
    You're walking the line between sane and absurd.

    Base your facts on worthless banter.
    Confidence in your lonely saunter.
    Worthless, worthless!
    You're all too worthless.

    And if I was you, I'd move on.
    I'd have packed my bags and been long gone.
    I promise you lies and I promise you hate.
    Just promise to admit you're a fake.

    I'll bare the title of a nympho,
    Primiscuous, arrogant bimbo.
    Liar and a tyrant of attention.
    Female the bathroom stall mentions.

    But denying you're fake is all you do.
    Falsifying your words to make you look true.
    I dispise your kind and all you are.
    It's like you and I have started a war.

    So hate me, degrade me.
    Dislike all that you see.
    Crawl back into your little black corner and weep.
    Rip up your body and let the blood seep.

    But recognize you're not alive.
    Realize noone hears your cries.
    Anguish and sorrow only take you so far.
    Then people see just what you really are.
     
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  2. Lance Leingod

    Lance Leingod The White Blade

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    Good poem as always but there are some parts that didn't feel complete to me. I'll list them later, I'm just in a bad mood today. I'll be better tomorrow.
     
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  3. Chance

    Chance Admitted Pokemon Fan.

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    Lance, I'd ask what Is wrong but I'm not sure if it's my place. [Though I did read your blog the other day and it hit pretty close to home. I'm sorry.] Thank you for your continued support though, it's greatly appreciated.
     
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  4. Lance Leingod

    Lance Leingod The White Blade

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    [Thanks Lucky. Its getting better over here now so I'm not depressed anymore :)]

    I'll list out the parts I thought were complete, even though you didn't really ask :p

    I thought that this was a little plain to me because I ended up wanting to know more on why it was worthless, like saying

    I thought that it might be good like this :D

    I thought this was just too short or something told me that I wanted more from it.

    I'm glad you like my support.

    That's about it for the poem but I hope this helps :D
     
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