Creative Writing A poem.

East and West.
Under common ground we unite.
The Flag of the sun and the Scarlet banner.
Life is pleasent and spring is coming.
The winds of that forest fortell a great fortune
You think the world is much more peaceful when everyone is hula~hooping
I think the world would be better if the workers of the world united.
We are different yet we connect. I feel compleate.

 

its a good poem Warsaw Pact

 

Good - (copying Basher) I sensed feeling..I think. I thought it was alright. Are you a first timer at peotry? ^_^

Bad - This poem just didn't touch me, for some reason. ANd that to ME is very odd. Using Hacker's sig as a idea for your poem is good and all, but I just didn't get it..Not being mean at all dear. Just being truthful for you, to help you in fact.

 

I thought it was good. It was good from the first to about the middle sentence and then it just didn't get to me as good. Great start but bad ending.

 

I think its awsome. It's very descriptive and puts a grand image into my mind. The only thing I didn't catch was emotion. But I think that it has some hidden in there for you.