Creative Writing Call of death

I'm not fond of this poem,but It is one that I worked on for a while.Yet somehow it still sucks.I think that it's kinda random.

The feeling pulses in your mind,
Awakining something not of your kind.
The room swims in a haze of darkness in front of your eyes,
You fall to your kness and cry at the midnight skies.

You resist the feeling as you lurch to the ground,
As you slowly die without a sound.
But the in the last moment of your days,
Comes one who can change you ways.
All you have to do is one little thing,
You wisper the word yes, as your heart sings.

Suddenly you are as calm as you have ever been,
Even though you commit the ultimate sin.
The pain of life is gone away,
Now humans are your feeble prey.

Suddenly you slip into a satanic embrace,
As the vampire lifts you up to his beautiful face.
Death has come for you but it will not win,
You stare at the blank face of your lovley kin.

The vampire tells you, You cannot die but you will feel pain,
Then death leaves you ,as it begins to rain...

 

aye, I hope I don't miss any of your poems when I leave. Dont write any untill I get back! K? I liked it, i have weird fantasies about vampires, *twitches*.

 

man.. it wont do it.. AYe I liked it love. But DO NOT write any untill I get back, i love being the first to reply.. Sunday you can write all you want

*fantasies of vampires*