Creative Writing Evil Wrath A Tale of Light and Darkness

Hello Everyone again. Evil Wrath was sortive just an ides that popped into my head. I Am not near finished with it yet, but I just wanted to see what you though and if it was good so far. Please give me you're opinion. Thanks.

 

The Main Characters of Evil Wrath

Kakurine Finoshi

Nationality- Japanese
Position- Priestess in Homoro/ School girl in Japan on Earth.
Magic level and user- High magic level, and can summon spirits and cast advanced controlling and normal spells.
Weapon-NONE!
Des-A young priestess in the magical realm of Homoro, but in the regular world a 11-year-old strange girl. Kakurine wields strange ancient inner magic’s and uses them to banish evil spirits or beings from both realms. Though she carries no weapons, she is the strongest magic user of her secret group of crime fighters, the Raidous. Her mother died when she was very young and she now lives with only her big brother Koru and her father Jahji. All of them miss her dearly and do not remember her deep secrets and powers. But she is the reason for Kakurine’s strange mystic.

 

Charlotte Nephemier

Nationality-Japanese
Position-Knight of King Conzet’s kingdom.
Magic Level and user- Medium magic level, user of dark magic . Performs ritual spells and fights well with rapier.
Weapons-Enchanted Rapier- Can blast dark magic balls from its end and when pierces skin sinks still freezing poison into the enemy’s soul and body.
Des-Rose is a 11 year old girl living with her parents in the regular world. Though she is popular at school, she has many secrets to hide. She wields Dark Magic but uses its powerful purposes for good and not to aid the forces of evil. Even her parents don’t know about her powers and only her and her new evil fighting squad truly know the deep meaning. Though she has much dark magic, she also is skilled with a enchanted rapier, given to her when she joined when she joined the King Conzet’s, of the realm of Homoro, knightmenship and allegiance. She only cast her magic if absolutely needed, and would rather fight using a weapon. She hopes to be a big help to Raidous, the new crime smashing team, in secret.

 

Narin Koniakawa

Nationality-Japanese
Position-Cyber Warrior
Magic Level and user- User of psychic abilities and is at medium strength with them now. He hopes to learn more about them.
Weapons- Cyber energy sword and laser gun aid him in the heat of battle
Des- Narin is a 11 year old boy who is not so good in school but is great at fighting and sports. In the Magical Realm of Homoro, this kid is a cyber fighter. Though a young for this responsibility and occupation, they accepted him because of his pure skills. Youngest in the Cyber fighter’s academy and alliance, he is practically their best fighter. Narin has a device on his constantly worn belt that allows him to morph into his cyber suit. This gives him armor and protection from most harm. Though he doesn’t use magic, he has minimum psychic abilities such as telepathy and telekinesis to help him in battle. He is learning more psychic techniques and hopes to master those abilities. None in his family knows this info and he hopes form them not to find out. With his cyber abilities, he decides to join the Raidous a club of crime fighters and hopes to help them with his cyber abilities.

 

A not so Normal school Day

As the bus pulled to an abrupt holt, Kakurine ran towards it in such a rush that she almost tripped on the damp pavement. The sprinklers on their front lawn were broken and her father Jahji had been talking about reparing them by the end of this month. Though it was the last day of the month, Kakurine hoped he would get cracking on it, for she did not wish to trip and embarrass herself in front of her classmates. She boarded the bus and sat alone on an empty seat towards the middle for not to feel the jerks and bumps of the ride. She placed her white backpack on the seat area that was left next to her to save a spot for her friend Charlotte. Charlotte was a peaceful silent girl who kept to herself. She got average grades and to Kakurine was a great friend.

 

The bus reached the next stop and more kids piled in, this causing the bus to be way more crowded but it felt comfortable.
“Hey Kakurine!” said a voice from behind her.
She turned to see that it was her friend Charlotte. Kakurine removed her backpack from the open space and motioned Charlotte to sit next to her.
“So what’s up? “ she asked Charlotte
“Nothing really except the sky,” responded Charlotte sarcastically.
“So what are you doing for the Testrononium Project?” asked Kakurine. “I am doing mine on author based novels like biographies.”
“Well, I don’t really know yet.” said Charlotte “But I will let you know when I do know.”
“Cool then.” Kakurine responded with joy.

 

The bus came to a jerk and stopped at the school. They walked together to their core class and entered. Their teacher, Mr. Lanisfur was seated at his desk writing or filling out some kind of form that Kakurine and Charlotte believed to before for the student body elections. None of them were running so they could really care less. They set down their backpacks right across from each other since the desks were shifted that way and the bell rang. And class began.
After class they left for second period with Mrs. Gwaniop and from there proceeded to break. During break, they walked to the juice machines buying them early so that they wouldn’t have to wait in the humongous lines at lunch. They were talking about the group project that was just assigned to them and how the other person in their group seemed interesting since they were new to the class. The new kid was known as Narin Koniakawa. He was a medium sized kid who looked very built for his age. He was very open and seemed almost to open for the other two. Though, he was nice and wasn’t foul as new students sometimes were.

 

“So what do you think of him?” asked Charlotte. “I believe he is sortive cute.”
“He’s to wild for me” responded Kakurine dully. All the time Kakurine had known Charlotte she had always seemed in a little love fantasy tale or something. Kakurine did not mind because it was perfectly normal, but for her, it just seemed she wasn’t ready for those types of commitments.
“Oh well.” sighed Charlotte. “I don’t mind for that is one more person I don’t need to worry about getting mixed up with him also.” Charlotte spoke joyfully. The bell rang and it was now time for 3rd period. Charlotte had to leave since she had band instead of regular wheel elective classes. She waved goodbye to her friend and began to walk to her next class. On the way on walking through one of the hallways, she spotted Narin, looking on his schedule.

 

“Hey Narin, need help?’ she asked politely.
“Oh thanks.” He responded sheepishly.
Narin handed Kakurine the schedule and surprisingly enough, they had the same class.
“Well, it looks as if you can follow me for I have the same class as you.” She told him.
“Sweet. Can I walk you there?” He asked sarcastically
“Umm. Right, sure, you can walk with me if that’s what you mean. Otherwise, save that stuff for Charlotte.” She told him seriously.
Narin took the hint and they walked off to the next class. The first few minutes they were silent, and then Narin brought up a subject to begin a conversation. After a good deal of thinking he asked Kakurine: “So Charlotte likes me?”

 

She turned to him, glancing at his puzzled face and gave him a laughing smile. “Well, I would say at least a little.” She told him. Then asked: “Do you like her?”
“Well if she likes me then, yes of course” he responded.
They reached the class in plenty of time and did not continue the conversation since Kakurine saw Narin face changing beet red. She did not want to make a rude intrusion to the new student so she just sortive smiled off the inner laughter that was bubbling constantly inside each time she thought about it.
After 3rd period they went to 4th period, which was a period just to look and study stuff at the library. Narin walked from period to period with the two girls and Charlotte and him kept constantly blushing and avoiding eye. This romantic action kept Kakurine laughing constantly inside.

 

As the three entered the library, they were put into groups of three along with their peers. Kakurine and Charlotte were chosen to guide the new student, Narin. Charlotte was bedazzled with overlapping joy. Kakurine was glad for her friend being so happy.
Their assignment for today, being a very boring one, was to study about the Ancient Egyptians civilizational activities. They went to the Ancient Civilization section in their library, this being the most obvious place to look, and began searching for their subject.
“Is this what we always do?” asked Narin boringly.
“Usually, or something similar.” said Charlotte in a charming voice.
Kakurine giggled and both of their heads swung in her direction.
“What’s so funny Kakurine?” asked Charlotte politely, her cheeks turning plush.
“Oh nothing.” She replied and walked off searching.

 

By the end of the period they had found some information on the subject, and since the assignment was do in two weeks, they decided to meet at the library after school so that they could get in done and not have it lying on their backs. The bell rang for dismissal and they left silently, walking to the public library to do some research.
They entered the library and slowly walked to the section, whispering to each other about their teachers and classes. When they got to the section, they were amazed a how big it was. Kakurine decided that if they would split up, they might find some info faster. Charlotte and Narin agreed and they began to search.

 

As Kakurine was searching slowly but accurately through the shelves and piles of books and books, one in particular, caught her eye. In had a title that was in a different language. But as she looked harder, it seemed to change before her eyes. It read Homoro, Realm of Mystic Lands and Worlds. Before opening the book, she looked around her, making sure no one was around her. She had a strange feeling around her and inside her. As she opened it, it read: Welcome to the land of Mystery and Magic. Homoro beith it’s name. A great evil has recently over token the land. Gandor, the great dark mage, is sending vicious spirit and creatures’ form the underworld. The people are mad and frightened. They pray for survival and do not wish to die under his evil reign. We are dying and in vain. Someone must help us; we are depending on the legend three to save us. We are… Suddenly the worlds trailed off. Kakurine’s eyes blurred and she disappeared as Narin and Charlotte both walked around the corners. They gasped as they saw the book lying open and know Kakurine to be seen.

 

The First Glimpse of Homoro

Kakurine awoke with a start. The sun was shining brightly in her face. She stood up and scanned the area around her. East of her was a forest, green and rich with pines. South of her was a menacing mountain and mountain range. West of her was a sapphire blue lake. North of her viewpoint was a dazzling white castle. She began walking in its direction and arrived there within a half an hour. Walking into the villa, she was amazed at the people’s life style. It was as if in a fairy tale that was talking place in the medieval time period. She thought that this might be the land that was being described in the book. < But how is that possible? > She thought to herself. <They talked about it being dark and evil. >

 

Kakurine headed toward the castle entrance, but hesitated when her eyes located the guards. <Maybe, or rather hopefully, they won’t notice. > She closed her eyes as her body approached them. They gasped in amazement and bowed. <Awkward. > Thought Kakurine, continuing. As she entered the main hall, she saw the king seated at his royal golden chair. His crown was filled with sparkling jewels and gems. Sweating as she approached, she gulped down what seemed to her as a round thick ball and began to speak in a weak voice.
“I must speak with you in privacy you’re highness.”
The king nodded with politeness and swished the guards away ordering them to leave the room and shut the doors.
“And you are?” asked the king
“ I am Kakurine, Kakurine Finoshi and….”
“What!” exclaimed the king. “Kakurine! The legend!”
“ I don’t have a clue what you’re talking about you’re highness.” She said politely

 

“Oh of course you don’t, that means that the legend is true. Com my dear I shall show you the legend in script form, I know that you just arrived here with puzzlement but you must.

 

Well that is it so far. Please post you're commets, questions ect. Here. I will post more of the story after I get a few opinions and write more. Thank you! ^-^!