Inu-Yasha Fanfiction: Inu Yasha style!

Hello, again! I will be posting my Inu Yasha fic here, so please, if you read it, tell me what you think, and if it stinks, please help me to fix it. i also need help with the title(i am totally lost!!).
PEACE!!!
Well, here it goes!


Chapter One


Sesshomaru sat on a high branch of a willow tree, hoping that he wouldn’t be seen. Suddenly, a sharp pain shot through his shoulder, Reminding him of what had happened earlier that day. How could his brother, his half –breed brother, defeat him? Was not Sesshomaru one of the – no, the strongest being in the world? These thoughts raced through his mind as his eyes began to blur, and started to lose conciousness. Sesshomaru started to fall from the tree, and knew no more….
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Sorona walked happily through the forest, occasionally picking a flower or two. She had long, aqua blue hair, violet eyes, and a cat’s ears and tail. Her camouflaged kimono was worn comfortably on her body, and large black boots were covering her feet. Sorona’s ears pricked up as she heard something crash in the deep forest. Bird flew away from the area of the crash, squaking warning calls.
“Must’ve been a tree.” She said to herself, but couldn’t help but wonder what had happened. She was a very curious person, after all.
Cautiously, she walked to where the crash was heard. A few minutes later, she found out what it was.
Sorona dropped her boquet of flowers. There was a young man lying on the ground. He had long, silver hair, and a white kimono with red flowers on it. The presence of broken tree branches indicated that he had fallen from a nearby tree. Even more cautiously, Sorona crept over for a closer look. He also had very serious wounds all over his body.
“Ouch” she said, “Poor guy. I better help ‘im before it’s too late.”
She whistled a short tune, and as if out of nowhere, a beautiful black horse trotted overto her side.
“Shadow, we need to take this guy back home. Think you can carry both of us?” she asked the horse sweetly.
Shadow nodded and Sorona hoisted the boy on its back. She made a clicking sound and the horse galloped through the woods.
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Well, that's all for now....if y'all really like it i'll put more up.
Hoping to hear from you,
Sorona-chan

 

So far

It's starting out really well. I'd love to see more of it.

 

REALLY? Man, i thought it stank....oh well. there is one problem, though, the lines that seperated different character's perspectives din show up!! gotta fix it!

 

I think it turned out pretty well. Besides, I dont know about what other people think, but it looks much better with out the lines.

 

I like it. I like it. I like it. Wheres the rest? As far as the lines go that just says a differnt person is starting in. It might be hard to tell without them but u could have also just amde what Sess thought as a prologue. But the way you want it is fine

 

Here's chapter two!! Glad you like it!

Chapter Two

Sesshomaru slowly opened his eyes, surprised to find himself in what appeared to be a small shack... There was a small fire burning in the middle of the room, and a youthful looking girl was cooking something over it. The girl noticed he was awake and smiled.
“Glad you’re awake. How do you feel?” she asked cheerily.
“W-where am I? Who the heck are you?!” Sesshomaru demanded, ignoring her question.
“My name is Sorona, but all the villagers used to call me Sorona of the Mori. This is my home. What’s your name?” she asked, ignoring his rudeness.
Once again, he ignored her question.
“How in the world did I end up here?”
“I found you in my woods. You were badly hurt, so I brought you back here and tended to your wounds.” Sorona explained, then concentrated her gaze on what she was cooking over the fire.
“You should have minded your own business. I didn’t and I don’t need your help.” Sesshomaru snarled.
“Ok then, leave.” She said without looking up at him.
“What?” he asked, not expecting to have gotten that response.
“You said you didn’t need my help, so get out of my house. Leave.” She said, and started stirring whatever she was cooking over the fire.
“Hmph, good riddance.” He said, and started to get up. He was halfway up when his shoulder shot out in pain. He winced, hoping she wouldn’t notice it, and continued, which only increased the pain. Finally he gave in to it and fell back. Sesshomaru glared at her. “Alright, you’ve made your point…I’ll stay…But only until my shoulder has healed. Then I’ll be gone.”
Sorona smirked. “Suit yerself. It’ll be nice to have some company around here.”

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Sorona started the next morning by making some breakfast for herself and her new guest, who was still sound asleep. He looked so peaceful there, as if he wasn’t asleep, but…dead. She knew this wasn’t true of course, because she could see him breathing. When she had finished her meal, her guest was still asleep, so she set a full plate next to him, so when he woke up he could eat. Quietly, she started walking towards the door, but was stopped by his voice.
“You waste your time. I don’t eat human food.” He said suddenly.
“Well, if you don’t want it, you can give it to Shadow.” Sorona suggested.
“Who the heck is ‘shadow’?” He asked her, starting to get irritated.
Sorona whistled, and a black horse appeared in the doorway of the shack.. “He’s Shadow. I’ve got to go now, so if you need anything, jest whistle.” She said, walking out the door, but he stopped her again.
“By the way…my name is Sesshomaru…” the boy mumbled.
“Well, Sesshomaru, jest make yerself at home. Seeya!” and in one swift leap, she was gone.
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Whew! Dasa lotta typin! hope you guys like it. I have like 50 more pages that i wrote at home, just gotta type them now...-_-;;

 

I see. Each chapter is one page long. I was wondering why they were so sort. Cool. Very good. I like it.

 

Thanks for sticking with me, prene. Ok, hers the next chapter.

Chapter Three

Sesshomaru looked down at his plate. The dish was composed of: two roasted newts (hey, I like those!), one raw egg (yuck!), a small pile of brussel sprouts (double yuck!), and some kind of biscuit type thing. He ate the two roastd newts willingly, and tried the biscuit (which was actually good). When the plate was clear of all likeable food, he pushed the plate to the now sleeping horse in the back of the shack. The impact frightened the animal at first, but when it saw the contents on the plate, it gave a small squeal of delight and began eating the brussel sprouts. After the horse cleared the plate, it walked over to Sesshomaru looking for another treat.
“Get away from me, you filthy animal.” Sesshomaru snapped at the horse. The animal’s ears drooped. It sulked to the doorway of the hut and vanished.
Now Sesshomaru was alone in the little shack, and he soon grew bored. He was counting all the cockroaches that crawled in and out of the hut when something caught his eye. It looked like a staff of some sort. It was also within grasping distance, so he took it and checked to see how sturdy it was. Perfect. He hoisted himself up without as much pain as last night, and began to stagger towards the doorway of the shack. When he finally got there, he stopped dead.
Only two to three feet within the doorway of the hut was a 90 degree drop. Great, this shack was on a ledge. It didn’t make any sense to him, for no human- in fact, some demons couldn’t even make a climb like that. Sesshomaru stood ther, puzzled, until he heard something coming up behind him.

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Sorona flipped over another rock, hoping to find some grub. Literally. So far, she found: ten newts, fifteen worms, and five bird eggs (well, four bird eggs; she got hingry along the way). A few minutes later, her ears pricked up as she heard something; like a fight; coming from the mountain on which she lived.
“Just some bird demons on a hunt.” She said to herself, and paused. “Wait. Hunt? On my mountain?” Her eyes widened, for she knew what they were hunting…

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Sorry for being so short, guys. I'll make up for it in the next chapter, which is where i think the story starts to go downhill....-_-;;

 

nice story! i like it too! it really is growing interesting and i'd like to see more soon. i think it's really good that a chapter is only one page long cu'z it's not too long and getting boring to read. good job!

 

So far it's really cool.

 

Thank You!!!!!!!!!

 

It's an interesting story so far. ^_^ The lines didn't show up because of the way the text boxes for posts are coded. I recommend putting short asterisk lines between sections (***).

Also, another recommendation is to post it at Fanfiction.Net. It isn't too much trouble to sign up, and then people can post reviews for you and the like. Here's the URL if you don't know (though it's really easy): http://www.fanfiction.net

 

wow, that's a good story. Not many about Sesshomaru out there. Nice change. Sorry I took a while to read it. But hey, I like it. I think it's better than mine. If you wanna read mine just ask and i'll post the url. Not that anybody is gonna ask though. It's kinda long too, it's 6 chapter's? not sure, haven't updated lately.