Creative Writing Finding Neko

Ok here is the first story ill post on m2a

Finding Neko

An anime fan boy named Adam goes around to a anime convention He walks around and looks at all the cute little toys. Then, he sees it! A beautiful girl dress like a neko. He smiles and walks up to her, but he trips on someone’s cape from their costume and falls flat on his face. She sees him and helps him up. "Are you ok?" she asks "Yea um, great. I fell on my face but it is still ok I guess.” "I hope so” She said as she walked away. He was confused should he go after her? or should he just stand their like an idiot? "Hmmm" he thinks... "Hot girl or stand here?" "Hot girl or stand her...?" "I AM CRAZY! I HAVE TO FIND HER"

He went around all over to look for her. He even took a microphone and announced. "Will the hot cat girl who helped up this dude come to the main entrance?" People looked at him like he was crazy. He went to the entrance and about 20 cat girls were there. He was in shock. "Umm, why are all you ladies here?" He asked. They replied "We heard some guy is having a cat girl contest it is a rumor and he wants us to help some guy too." He looked at them "riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiight." He slowly backed away and pretended not to have made that announcement. About an hour passed and he was still upset. All of a sudden one of those contest cat girls came up to him. "Um, can I help you?" he said. "BAKA!" she screamed as she slapped him "I waited for this "so called" contest, missed a bunch of events, and I just found out YOU made the prank announcement." He turned his head to see 20 angry cat girls looking at him "Oh...****" He said as he got up and started to run for his life

Mean while at a quiet little dinner hall. That girl he was looking for was having a quiet little meal. Then, all of a sudden the floor started to shake. She sat confused and looked around to see that guy from before run past her followed by 20 cat girls. She sat with wide-open eyes. "I guess he has cat nip in his pockets or something." She got up and followed them. "HEY!" she screamed "What are you girls doing?" She was running beside one as they spoke "Oh this baka bastard told a lie on the announcements and tricked us into thinking he was having a contest when he was just looking for some cat girl who helped him." She stopped as they ran by and she thought "Cat girl...who helped him...me?" She felt sorry for him because he was only looking for her because he had a little crush. "Poor guy" she said with a frown.

Meanwhile the girls where still casing him like mad. "GET HIM" one shouted, "YEAH, HE MADE ME MISSED THE NEW CAT ANIME PREVIEW!!!" another screamed.
He was running and screaming "GOMEN! GOMEN! I AM SORRY I WAS JUST LOOKING FOR A GIRL, WHO WAS LIKE ALL YOU GIRLS!" They got madder "WHAT DO YOU MEAN!?" One screamed, "...OMG HE IS A PERVERT!" another screamed in horror. He just had a sweet drop from his face as his eyes were spin and ran fast saying, "****, why did I get into this?" All of a sudden the announcement went on again, and it was that girl he liked. "Um, who ever is wearing a cat outfit and is a girl please come to the main lobby for a prize. First one to get there gets a free season of Digi Charat on DVD"

He kept running not hearing the announcement. He went faster and faster when he noticed it was quiet...Too quiet. He turned around and NO ONE was after him anymore
He stood their confused "Did God just kill all the Neko's? Or did I become the Flash and outrun them?" He turned around and there she was. "HI!" she said with a giggle. "Oh, um, yea, hi" He said very shyly. "I heard you where looking for me?" she replied. "Um," sweat bead drops from his forehead "yea, you could say that" He said. She blushed "To be honest I was looking for you too." He stood there in shock "...Me?" looks around "ME!?" "Are you sure you have the right guy?" She giggled "If your the one I helped and who tried finding me by making a announcement that went out of hand.... Then yes, you." He smiled "oh, wow, how nice." She giggled again "I was afraid to talk to you but now I am not" "I am not afraid, not even to..." she kissed him. He was shocked. A girl dressed as a cat just kissed him. He thought "...HELL YA! YAHOOO!" She smiled and said "So, what is your name?" He looked at her and said with a smile "Adam." She giggled "How sweet" "I am Jen." He got hearts all around him as he whispered "Jen."
She winked at him and said "So how about we go up to my hotel room and get to know each other a bit better, he he he." He opened his jaw "SURE! I mean yes that would be nice." She smiled "Oh, but I don’t have any anime I just gave away my last Digi Charat DVD to someone." They walked hand in hand as they went in an elevator.

THE END!

 

i don't remeber that last paragraph...,
anyways, great story, someday, i might post one of mine.

 

That was good! I mean, like how you were able to write down a whole story so short. My cousin made me do her homwork for her and I had to create a story. My stories were so long that I ended up just scribbling whatever.

 

It was okay. A lot of grammar mistakes and spelling errors were irking me the whole time, and although I don't really like zany anime imagery & actions with cliches going on, it was still kinda interesting. The lil jokes here and there were a lil refreshing, but the best part is the punchline at the end, which was both sweet and clever.

 

1) Grammar.

2) Spelling.

3) Anime Cliches don't work in fiction unless stratigecally placed.

4) WTF was this about?

 

Haha, isn't it obvious? It's about a guy looking around for the girl who caught his attention. Wow, you pointed out the same bad points that I did (the spelling, grammar, and cliches).