Creative Writing Here I am

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  1. Engel

    Engel New Member

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    Here I am, wondering what have I done
    I can't see, the pain that's inflicted in me
    I can't hear, the screaming in my head
    Here I am, this is what you did to me

    Crying in the dark, waiting for comforting words
    Seeing your face, the anger within
    Here I am, the cause of your madness
    Here I am, rocking inside
    Here I am, shaking away
    Here I am, wondering what have I done
    I can see, the tears down on me

    Leaving behind, the past never revealed
    Meeting you, the shadow of the murderer
    Singing a rhyme, so far away
    And yet, Here I am, back into your arms

    Running away, away from the sorrow
    Running away, far from this place
    Here I am, with a new beginning, Here I am
    Here I am, dead as a past

    The past is the past, we can't change it
    I've suffered enough, I wouldn't want to waste it
    Here I am, abused and bewildered
    Here I am, in pain and suffering
    Here I am, Here I am, Here I am

    Cried in the dark, Here I am
    Seen your face, Here I am
    Left you behind, Here I am
    Ran away, Here I am
     
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    Engel, Jun 6, 2005
  2. Yossarian

    Yossarian Yossarian Lives!

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    Very distressing....

    i like it, good job.
     
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    Yossarian, Jun 6, 2005
  3. luvweaver

    luvweaver Ad Jesum per Mariam

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    Very well done. Anyway, *HUGS* :) Hope you feel better soon...
     
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    luvweaver, Jun 6, 2005
  4. yakamashi

    yakamashi New Member

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    kya~! that was so... lonesome.... but good! meh, i liked it a lot... ^__^ dude.. you gotta make a poem about goldfishes dying (eating eachother) i tell ya...
     
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    yakamashi, Jun 6, 2005
  5. Peachy

    Peachy ☆liberal HMod☮

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    Dude that is good.. your peoms are beautiful Engel I love reading them! :D
     
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    Peachy, Jun 6, 2005
  6. Engel

    Engel New Member

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    Thanks guys! I kinda wrote that while I was in a class, on a computer. XD (Slacking; but we were studying for our exams the following day, so it's no biggie.) Hoped you liked. It doesn't really flow well, but who cares, eh?

    Yes...Goldfish. Uhm...I'll see what I can do, I'll work on it. Though it's probably not gonna work as well as I want it to be; I tend to just write things at the top of my head. XD
     
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    Engel, Jun 8, 2005
  7. Basher

    Basher Mad Writing Skillz

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    I like it. Keep up the good work.
     
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    Basher, Jun 12, 2005
  8. Yasuko

    Yasuko I beg your pudding?

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    Ah, so angsty. Sounds like emo lyrics to me for sure! Good job with that~ it could definetely be a song if you ask me.
     
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    Yasuko, Jun 12, 2005
  9. Ninja Yuffie

    Ninja Yuffie New Member

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    Interesting... I enjoyed it ^_^
     
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    Ninja Yuffie, Jun 13, 2005
  10. Engel

    Engel New Member

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    Hey. Thanks a lot everyone. I'll keep on posting my works when I think of any. Thanks for the encouragement. :D
     
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    Engel, Jun 16, 2005

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