Creative Writing Insanity is my best friend

It's twisted and weird but I wrote it so I'll deal with it...

The smell of death creeps ever near,
Horrifying you victim and making you sneer.
Dried blood cakes her head,
Turning her face a crimson red.

Her face is drained of all of it's hues,
She will now pay all of her dues.
You grin at her with that twisted smile,
Her odor is filled with her filth and bile.

You curl you fingers around her wrist,
Giving it a rather nasty twist.
Her cries of pain only enhance you rage,
You insanity is let out of it's cage.

She screams and sobs across the floor,
As you drag her near the door.
The knife is sharp and so sleek,
You give her just a tiny peek.

Then it slides so silent across her throat,
And this is the murder she wrote.

I know the last line sounds like it's a rip off of the T.V show but I no idea whast else to put there.

 

well this poem is different... in a different sort of way.

i'm actually not sure if i like it or not. im feeling a little indifferent.

it was well written though. nice work.

 

Boring, really. As far as murders go it's uninventive and lacks impact.

 

Uhm....I kinda pictured a poem in such subject a bit different. Im not gonna get into details why, because then ill sound like a serial killer or something. But the poem needs fixing as far as i see it.

- Kaiyon

 

Nice. It has a deep sense to it, oh so deep.


-Ian

 

I see a couple of r's missing, but other than that I think it's great.

 

yes but slicing someone's throat makes for better poetry.... hmm... =)

 

As long as you get you and your right it will turn out fine. I liked it keep it up.

 

i liked it, i like cascade's work. she's good.