Creative Writing Look at us both..

My poems aren't good as Sakuma-San ,Vicious,or Lucky's but I try so be honest so i can see what I have to work on..

As I look into those painful eyes
With my arms around your neck
I realize how lonely we could have been
And I never regret

I cry everytime..i'm alone
Just thinking about my life
But then you come into my dak corner
And lift my feelings up high

I never thought i'd ever live a day
I didn't have to strain
Untill feeling your hand in mine
those seconds I almost forgot my pain

We never hear each other say
I love you and stay with me
We just look into the world unfolding in front of us
And look for those better days....
look at us both....

 

*gasp*

*applauds*

Me likey poem. Yesh. *sniffle* So sentimental.

 

i agree with sakuma-sans comment....

*sniff* so much... happy/lonely/other stuffiness...

... reminds me of my life.... except with no guy... just by my lonely self.... WHY?!

 

Thank you both..ya'll are so *special!*....

 

I like it. You are also good. Please keep it up.

 

thank you Basher.. I'll try

 

*starts crying*

It was wonderful i absolutly love it