Creative Writing Love you

Standing, in this shadow of perfection.
Call me what you will, as most should.
Jaded, I would cry out to you if you remember
Devastation, chaos, discord, malice.

I break when bent, shatter upon inpact.
It's odd how you don't see this,
Left me quaking in the wake of your truth.
I don't need your truth; It is a lie.

Maybe in time, you'll see this.
You cannot be the pheonix, there is no risen.
Catastrophe, it is shelter in the light of faith.
Caution, danger, fear, loathing.

Do you really know me? Know this?
Can you feel me tearing at the flesh I was given?
Can you breathe for me once more, because I can't breathe when you're gone.

Passion, rash and unknowing.
It's so naive to me, to this...Phrase.
Where has the passion hidden?
Does it matter when romance is a song?

Tears are tainted again, words are meaningless.
Worlds collide, people die.
Everything is falling to pieces,
And I am dreaming...I must be.
Please let me be dreaming..

This is real.

 

wow...that poem took my breath away. Amazing!

 

Woooooooow!That is a wonderful poem!I really think you got some talent,I really do!I think you should write more!

 

double thread sweetie delete one. I never write peoms that don't ryhme. I've always thought my poems sounded better when I did make them rhyme. I really like this Lucky!! Gosh!! If they have the creative writing award that i suggested you and one other person are gonna give me a run for my money $$$

 

The other thread is a different poem...
Thanks though Blue and thanks to the rest. It's good to hear some praise.

 

Wonderful. You poetry is like words in motion. It is a delite to read.