Creative Writing Love you

I can feel you breathing,
Cool and calm and absolutely claimed.
Apparent are the hearts of those
Who know when they are beat.
They wonder where you've been back at the office.
They wonder why you haven't answered your phone.
They don't know about this rapture, they don't know you arn't home.

I can hear you whisper,
soft and subtle and intently thought out.
If this is sin, let me sin.
If this is ending, let time stop.
They ask if it is worth it.
They ask if I am truely enthralled.
And answering, I grace them with these words I've thought for so long.

"I love him."

I do..Every fiber of my being.
I do..Every cell is this frame.
I do..You ask me to marry you.
And I can only nod, smiling.

"I do."

Is this wrong to take part in?
Can I not make them see
That every small bit of you
Should spend eternity wrapped in me?

Oh, I love it. I love it all.
I love the remarks,
The scowls and more then that, the hate.
But most of all, I love fate.

Binding me to you.

Letting me bid my time
here in heaven,
An image of earth,
With you.

 

sorry man..thought it was the same

some of it ryhmed some of it didn't, you are simply amazing..don't post anymore dear..your gonna beat me..*sniffles* great poem

 

*smiles* I've never taken a class on poetry but like most writing, it has to be descriptive for it to touch people. =)

 

that was awsome, and you pulled it off nicely. There was a variety of sentence (like), and words, and to flow was perfect.

 

Agreed, and you've pulled that off very well, too. Nicely done, it's a very beautiful poem. May I ask if you wrote this intending it for a certain person, or is it just something you came up with out of the blue?

 

Oh, it's for you..I mean, just out of the blue. xD

<3

 

Oh that is just scary. Other then that nice poem.

 

That poem was wonderful!It is just amazing how good you are!