Creative Writing max-vision

ok, I got this story I've been thinking abt. Well, I did some sketch of the character but its not ready yet. I'm kinda new to this, so I think my idea isn't as original as I want it.

This is how it starts:
a boy named Max is kinda addicted to the internet. All he does is sits in front of his pc. ok, so one day a virus spreads thru the internet & its the 1st of its kind cos it can infect humans. well, several hundred ppl got infected & died horribly. Max however has a certain inmune system developed from his extreme exposure to computer rays. Instead of killing him, the virus causes his eyes to mutate. He starts seeing things. he can see a tragedy that will happen to a person when he touch the person's chest.

erm, thats all for now. can someone please comment?

 

Sounds good Gabrielle or should I say Onesan ^_^. Can't wait to see how your story goes and how the manga will be like later on.