Creative Writing Nuke 14

Well here goes my story.I will slowly post more and more to it so read on as the week progresses.Please feel free to post your thoughts at any time in the story.

Story:

Hello my name is Scott Price.Befor the media begins to spam your telvision about how I am a good kid gone, and befor writers all across the world begin to write down my story, I want to be the first to tell it.It all started about four years ago when I was a freshman in high school.It was my first week and I had only started talking to a few other kids I knew I could get along with.While I was walking down the science build coradoor I was pushed down by a junior who then called me "Freshmeat." Of course I did a little mumbling wich was probly my biggest mistake because he returned to stuff me into a locker.Luckly enough the owner of the locker released me just after second block had ended.I met my friends in the usual spot and we talked about what had happened:

Scott:I don't see the point in this it is so stupid things have to change.

Brian:There is nothing we can do about it.We are only freshman, don't worry it will get better next year.

Andrew:I have to agree with Brian.Next year we will be softmores and there will be no reason to pick on us.

Anne:I think you are wrong.Even the freshman make fun us....

William:She is right it will be the same next year.

At this time the bell had rung and we all went back to our classes.That night while I layed in my bed I knew to have changes done it would call for something drastic, and it wasn't just the school that needed changing it was the whole world.Countries at war with each other over nothing but land.What was happening to the people.They were falling apart. I knew something had to be done but I couldn't figure out what, and then I had a dream.A dream about what I could do to change it all.I saw my self as a leader.A leader of an elite military force.If they did not change then we would we change them.....

 

Hey there Kenny, I like it. It has a good storyline and plot, but the way you put it, it looks kinda like a play. It would make a REALLY GOOD play!! Ive writtten them, and now that I think about it, it would make a better screenplay. when you finish it, send it somewhee and see what happens!
~Ginger