Creative Writing poem

To be weary down to the depths of your soul, to feel no emotions beyond a depressing fear, I am not worthy.

To drown in the dark depth, to fall into dreams with no waking, have no pity for a cur like me.

Emptiness echoes yesterday's dreams, not even heaven's rain can wash away the blood

Ripples across the sky, pestilence and death begot the gods' sin for man's flood

Cryptic meanings are lost on flocks, no memory of those who came before, forgotten is thee

The dog can not be purged of his lamb's breath, the forshadowed moon is lost in clouds of revery

No dedication to the sorrow

No words spoken for tomorrow



I'm still not sure about this one. Nobody said my peoms make sense to an outsider.

 

You may be right. I do see a deep meaning here. I still like it.

 

Oh man you're so goth you crap bats.

Decent, but heavy handed.

 

I am not goth , just moody and depressed at times.

I tend to forget my sorrow. I can be angry and mentaly beating myself up late at night. The next morning I act as though nothing were wrong. I just can't be depressed in the morning, I just lie to myself.

I rarely tell my friends what is wrong or even that there is anything wrong. Why burden them with my troubles? It seems so silly, my reasons for being sad that is. Of cours this line could mean something else.

 

Okay there Gothy McEmoKid.

 

That was deep... I'm drowning. ^_^


-Ian

 

*blink* Am I a Visigoth or an Ostrogoth? I like both equally, I mean the whole attacking rome and what not.
...I'll have to do more depressing poems. this is most amusing.

 

You're a Hot Topic Goth; enjoy your bad poetry and eyeliner overdose.

 

wow, you are really talented...there is such depth in your poem, i completely understand it. I write poems in the same style as you do. I'll post them sometime. Hats off to you, you got talent!
-Sabrina

 

I understand your poems. There pretty good actually. I like the last one, by this I am not trying to sound rude, but did you make up the last one.. because I think I have heard it before..?

<Insulting members is a rule in this forum I do belive..>

 

nice nice, Jackabee.. o and don't worry my eyeliner is most likely just as dark as yours ^_^

 

I liked it different from what I'm used to reading or writeing but it is very good keep up the excellent work