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  1. Jackabee

    Jackabee Captain Jackabee Sparrow

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    Sit still and tell me lies 12/16/2004

    Sit still now and tell me your lies

    I don't trust those honest eyes

    Read to me from the morning post

    Of how the world is made of toast

    Of how the angels newly catagorized

    All the dreams we have not realized

    Tell me more tales of distant lands

    And children saved by gods' hands

    Of tea parties with a hare and a hat

    And dreams of lions and smiling cats

    Of walls and mice, badgers and foxes

    and Bagless cats staying in boxes

    Of pies made of coconut cream

    Tell me once more of my dream

    Of fish swimming in cloudless skies

    Just please sit still and tell me lies





    ripple 12/15/2004

    Fish find solace in the empty skies

    The moon rises and the sun dies

    No voice, left unspoken all the lies

    Window to nowhere, heavens eyes

    Fleeing decay of yesterday, time flies

    Beneath the ripples, I can't hear your cries




    12/10/2004

    To awaken from a nightmare only choke on tears,

    The heavens echoe with devilish laughter as darkness nears,

    In the end I am alone. broken wings , broken hearts

    No comfort for a fool, I try to put back toghether the parts,

    But they're all missing, slipped from my hand.. You've all left.

    Fret not the sorrow filled, for of happiness they are already bereft.







    Errosion 12/10/2004

    Mayhaps my heart will turn to stone

    For all of you I wait alone

    Drifting in and out, slow frost creeps

    Into my broken dreams, sweet sorrow seeps

    My heart is already dead, so let fate do us part

    An allow my mallice filled mind to fine a new bad start
     
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  2. Basher

    Basher Mad Writing Skillz

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    Some lines made sense and some I have no clue on. Change those lines and it would be good.
     
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  3. Jackabee

    Jackabee Captain Jackabee Sparrow

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    It was more of a poem for my friends and a guy(named kevin, no one here knows him) who I now forgive.... but still have issues with.

    Sit still now and tell me your lies

    I don't trust those honest eyes


    me and issues with trusting people and people breaking that trust

    Read to me from the morning post

    Of how the world is made of toast


    Kevin wrote a poem about buttered toast... it would have been funnier if I hadn't been annoyed by him at the time

    Of how the angels newly catagorized

    All the dreams we have not realized

    Tell me more tales of distant lands

    And children saved by gods' hands


    more of those issues

    Of tea parties with a hare and a hat

    And dreams of lions and smiling cats


    Alice's adventures in wonderland... Narnia the musical

    Of walls and mice, badgers and foxes

    Redwall

    and Bagless cats staying in boxes

    on another board or two I am Kat and the Kat got out of the bag and someone stole her bag so she had to stay in a box =(

    Of pies made of coconut cream

    Tell me once more of my dream


    Coconut is yummy and I dream alot

    Of fish swimming in cloudles skies

    On OD I am RPfishh, cloudless skies represent no more worries or depression.

    Just please sit still and tell me lies


    Those darn issues again
    See just friends for further insight... or visit me at OD, RPfishh




    ripple 12/15/2004

    Fish find solace in the empty skies

    RPfishh again and perhaps loneliness

    The moon rises and the sun dies

    I am depressed mainly at night.

    No voice, left unspoken all the lies

    He never did call to say anything to me.

    Window to nowhere, heavens eyes

    Fleeing decay of yesterday, time flies

    Beneath the ripples, I can't hear your cries


    eyes are the window to the soul
    reference to my terrible sense of time
    fishhy refrence... and I am not listening any more


    12/10/2004

    To awaken from a nightmare only choke on tears,

    The heavens echoe with devilish laughter as darkness nears,

    In the end I am alone. broken wings , broken hearts

    No comfort for a fool, I try to put back toghether the parts,

    But they're all missing, slipped from my hand.. You've all left.

    Fret not the sorrow filled, for of happiness they are already bereft.



    Me being depressed... I feel like all of my friends are so far away




    Errosion 12/10/2004
    Mayhaps my heart will turn to stone

    For all of you I wait alone

    Drifting in and out, slow frost creeps

    Into my broken dreams, sweet sorrow seeps

    My heart is already dead, so let fate do us part

    An allow my mallice filled mind to fine a new bad start[/QUOTE]

    To the guy I had issues with... this is old stuff. I only seem to keep sad memories :p
     
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