Creative Writing *shrugs*

Well, I really like this poem. Except for the fact that when you do say it, it kinda reminds u of Captain Kirk......*coughsnicker* uh. Here, I'd like some criticism.

Eye of the Beholder

It is dark
Does the sunlight filter through the trees?
Do the clouds pass lazily by?

Sounds travel around
I
Can hear

Being guided
I
Am guided
By my senses

Warmth touches my skin
Beauty is all around me
I
Do not need to see
To know
To know
Life is precious
This
I
Know.

 

Wow...that's was...really....it had a invisble power in the entire poem

 

aw, teddz, thankyou. ^^ You're the only one who replied. At LEAST SOMEONE APPRECIATES MY GENIOUSE.

 

I'm sorry, but after saying it ala Kirk...

I wouldn't be able to reply without including LMAO.

 

I'm guessing the speaker (not the author of course) is supposed to be blind, right (like it isn't supposed to be obvious )? Like the little separations of the "I's" in each sentence. Nicely done, very nice.

 

Aye, aren't you smart? you've gained some points in my book.
I gave another poem to my english teacher before ( not this one) and he handed it back and said "It's good Kelly.....I just don't understand it."

damn english teacher. damn you.

 

I
like it.
But the kirkness... I did laugh.
Intelligent poetry, worded efficiently, exploring places unseen by others. Nice...

 

Wait I got a request! Can someone do Green Eggs and Ham as if Captain Kirk was the speaker?

 

Lmao!!!! what the heck? Never mind, I dont want to know probably. As far as the poem goes, wow!! That is awsome stuff there. I was moved beyond words....and that IS saying something.

 

Watch me. > = - )