Saber Marionette SMJ fic: "Pray"

Yeah, so. I did it again. "It" being looking back on old fics and finding them so abhorrent that I have to rewrite them entirely.

Sooo, after a long, long while working on it, it's finally done. Hopefully it's better than was, considering the first version happened back when I was like fourteen and my understanding of the characters has really changed a lot since then. I fear it's gotten a bit more cynical and uncomfortable, but... ^^; That's sorta how it is though, isn't it?

I present to you...

Pray
Believing the girls to be lost to the Mesopotamia, Otaru tries to cope.

Linked offsite cuz of salty language. :O

Please check it out, please enjoy.

 

Yay!

I read it, and I liked it better than the last time.

Also, congratulations for bringing back some life to this dusty forum!

 

Hee, thanks! I certainly am glad you like this version better, since... well, let's not speak of the old version. XD;

I will fight to the ends of the earth to keep this forum alive! 8O

 

Yay, thanks Xel!

 

I don't often read fan fics because I've read so many bad ones before, but yours was great! Very emotional! I felt you kept Otaru and Hana true to their characters. I hate it when people write fan fics and they either dont know the characters well enough to predict how they would react or they decide to change the characters completely just for the heck of it. Maybe thats just me though...Anyway, twas great! ^_^ Unfortunately, I never read your original so I can't offer any feedback on that.

Gee I just might have to start reading fan fics again