Creative Writing Struggle

She wakes up in the middle of the night
she wakes up with a feeling of fright
she wakes up she cant help but cry
she wakes up cause she is scared to die

From the earliest in the morning
into the deepest of the night
pain constantely plagues her
but she is too weak to fight
Her lover by her side
breathing, in and out
sleeping like a rose
upon a lovely cloud
And every day the same things
people come and people go
they cry, they hug, they feel sorry
but what she goes through, they dont know
They think about ending
the pain, the suffering
she must choose
what to lose
her lover in a seat
or the death at her feet
so her friends and family
gather around the room
they confince her to live
and they leave her in gloom
Now the sun goes down
and with her lover at her bed
she closes her eyes, a last kiss
she does not wake up, she is dead


Uhm... ok very depressing.. but its kinda the truth

 

Yeah sounds like me a little. I really try not to post a lot of my depressive and suicidal poems because people will think im crazy.. I loved it..*sniffle*

 

yeah I thats what I think.. but then again.. why should we care?
*hugs* ahh poor hazel

 

very good! i loved it! you have inspired me to write poetry! *goes to start a new thread* *hugs Hazel* i don't think your crazy. Very nice Silverline!

 

I really enjoyed the beginning lines of this poem, when it is describing the lovers breathing--- beautiful!

 

I did ? I inspired you?? I never thought I could do that.. lol nice.. please tell when u are finished ah

Thanks.. that part I like too.. but I think the end is a bit.. well.. too direct?

 

Another good poem by you. I should really put some up.

 

ah thnx and I would like to read a poem made by you