Creative Writing Take me A w a y

Hey guys! This is my first poem that I'm going to post...since I've come back. I think it's okay, but the important thing is what YOU think. Comment if you'd like to!
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I'm lost in Darkness
Will you come and find me, just to lead me out?
I will have to pay ten thousand souls for bail
Lead me out of the darkness, so you can be the next life I take away

I'm playing the Devil this time
I have ten thousand hearts to capture, will you be my first?
Lead me out of the darkness, out of the way
Help me claim my innocence, dear Lord.

I turned my back away from God,
He plucked my feathers away, left me alone
Lucifer, will you take me under your dark wings?

 

And a second...

This is really, really, really badly done..
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Sittin' here reminded of everything we've done,
Cuz' I'm missin' you, I'm suffocating without you;
Can you feel me there with you?

Everything left undiscovered, I'm wonderin';
Why do I need you?
Why is it that I'm crying out?
I need you, I need you right here beside me.

Dreamin' in the dark, so alone;
I know my heart is dying,
Fading, dying away.
Leave me here, sittin' here, reminded.

Can you feel me there with you,
Holding onto you, Giving in;
I'm without you,
Crying out.

I'm wonderin',
Why do I need you,
Why am I cryin' out?
I need you, I need you right here besides me.

 

Lyrics I wrote....I know. It's bad.

Omg, I found this; I wrote this during the summer, I think.
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S i n g me this song,
I'm done with just telling you what goes on in this lil' mind of mine,
I'm done with what's goin' on,
These changes around me, devouring me.
I'm done singing this last song, this serenity, crawlin--

I'm done holding on to the end of the cliff,
I'm done having to waste my time with you,
I'm done having to sing this song for you,
You've almost made me cry this time,
This time, I'm not going to let myself go.

Sing me this song,
I'm finished with just telling you,
I'm over with these differences between us,
If you want me back, you're going to have to finish it off.

I'm done holding onto this end of the cliff,
I'm crossing the line, across the borders,
I'm done singing this song for you,
These changes around me, they're taking over,
You've almost made me cry this time,
This time, I'm not going to let myself go.

Sing me this song, please ask me to come back,
I'm feelin' lonely, in my little space,
They're devouring me,
I crossed the line, crossed the border,
Across into nowhere.

 

Beautiful Sunset

A Beautiful Sunset
My mind's become so blurred
All of hopes gone down the drain
My eyes meander within the frozen rain
The sunrise gone bleak
The dark clouds hovering over
I fall from the sky, down the bitter longing Earth

So LoNg i've waited, beneath the cold, murky sky
a Godsend, a fallen deity over on the dark side
the dark side, lingering within my dark heart
the darkest heart, that never did any good

so long, i've said so long, i waved good-bye for so long
my eyes turned into a ruby stone.
Crush me, break me apart..

I'm the beautiful Sunset,
I'm the ending of all good, the ending of all faith and hopes and dreams...

 

All of them were good I like the first two the best