Creative Writing test your skills.

Okay everyone, how about this?
here we can post short stories we've written (anything at all)
and anyone can comment/make suggestions/chat about it/write their own or whatever, and at the end we can have a poll to decide who's story's the best?

(please tell me if this is a bad idea)

good luck!

 

some dodgey song me and my friend wrote

Chorus:
It hurts when you get knocked down
They kick you when your on the ground
then they pull you up like a friend,
just so that they can knock u down again.

Chorusx2

Teachers,
They always think they’re right,
So it makes them really tight.
Just cause your at school,
You have to obey all their rules.
But, if they bend them,
If they BREAK them,
They don’t care,
Personally, I don’t think that’s fair.
They give you 500 word essays
That are due practically the next day.

Chorusx2

Parents,
I know sometimes they treat you all good and well,
but it all evens up when they make your life living hell.
Half the time they despise you,
Half the time they respect you,
Their point, I just cant seem to find,
Probably just to mess with your mind,
Make you weak and confused
Then they can make you do what they want you to.
They want you to be the perfect son,
Study, study, study, never having fun.
Never happy with what you got,
Never sees wats there, only sees wats not.
Id think id already snapped,
If it wasn’t for my cds of rock and rap

Chorusx2

Bullies,
Its really kinda funny,
cause on tv they only want your lunch money,
but that’s not the case in real life,
They cause a lot of strife.
They offer you a smoke,
Then laugh when you choke.
They laugh at your pain,
cause they are insane.
Jacks gonna happen if you just sit on your *** and do nuttin,
So get off yer fatass, and go do somtin.
Go teach him a lesson
That he wont be forgetten.
Knock him out,
Punch his face till his teeth fall out.
The next day at school,
you see him acting all cool,
around the the hottest girls,
man it makes you hurl.
You say his mums a cow
And his really pissed now.
You sock him once, then he socks you back,
Everything is going black.
Your on the floor,
And you realize your dignity’s out the door.
You hear him laugh at you,
You feel him spit on you.
Blood from your nose is pissing everywhere,
But at that moment you don’t care.
You just wanna wipe that smile off his face,
Make him cry, big disgrace.
You get up
He shuts up,
You go again,
You fall again.
You land on your back,
You hear it crack.
“Hey, I tried” you think as everything goes black.

Chorusx3

 

Wow, morbid....

cool though. But I can't relate to it, I've never been bullied like that, some people just make fun of me, (and anime) but I don't care about those mental retards, I just tell them to...well...perhaps I won't repeat it...hehe..:sweat2:

...anyhow, cool song Blood_pheonix.

 

Con Cor Coriea

Con cor con sorei con sorei vai.
Con cor con sorei con sorei vai.
Inshai con tur ci tir sur kai
Con cor con cor con sorai vai
Con cor con cor con sorai vai
II sarai con sorei con sorei Rai.

II con cor sai.
II con cor sai.
II con cor sai sei coriea.
Inshia cor ki coriea.
Inshia con ci coriea.
Ien oc cor sei.
Ien oc cor sei

Iash oc cor ki coriea.
Iash oc con ci coriea.
Con cor con cor coriea.
Con cor con cor coriea
Con cor con cor con sorai vie.
Con cor con sorei con sorei vai.
Inshai con cor coriea.
Con cor coriea.
Coriea.

By Mika Derslycin & her mother Minka Dersleycin
October 31, 2002

 

Nice! No it was great mika I loved it!
Though I realy dont have any short stories I'll try to find one!

 

it's very nausiating.... too many colors, but oh well.....

 

i dont understand....

 

Song:

War Against The World

I look at you and see what you've done
Every individual has fallen into one
There is no place for me in this world
There is only us, our spirits curled
You laugh and point at all that is not you
But you are part of the collective too
You mold and form and force unto me
All the thoughts that were beaten into thee

(chorus)
I think of you and begin to see
Everything I will certainly come to be
I will laugh and point and put others to the test
I will begin to hide and lie like the rest

I can feel myself falling, even now, to them
I can try to fight, but I cannot win
I will fail and I will fall at your feet
For you attack my emotions and I fear your heat

(chorus)

I look at you now and begin to see
That you are scared just like me
You have ideas and you think of things
That are not accepted by the many beings
You wish your actions could be your own
But you fear where you will be thrown
You fear of them what I fear of you
You fear of what they will put you through

(chorus)

I don't think its done yet. Its Written by my brother, I think its cool.