Creative Writing The Legend of The Grey Dragon

Hello everyone, this is a short story I had to right for class. It is finished please tell me how you like it.Please try to ignore mistakes.

The Legend of the Grey Dragon


In ancient times, when dragons lingered the land, people believed that dragons were cursed. Some believed they were kind gentle creatures, and that's what's this story is about.

One evening in the village of Katoro their once lived a girl and her father. The girl's name was Sandra. She was a kind and gentle girl and felt deeply for others. Her hair was brown and naturally long. She had eyes of hazel and a heart of pure gold. Her father, Rick, was an angry man, the grumpy type. She believed he was like this because her mother had died when she was very young.
Sandra and her father lived in a simple cottage above the village on a hill. It had quite a good view of the village below, and sometimes Sandra would love to gaze down and see the sites. In fact this evening she was going to go star gazing. But this evening was different.

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As Sandra walked out of her cottage she looked up seeing the glimmering stars. Like a dark blanket covering the sky. Then she noticed something which startled her to death. She saw a shadow gliding across the sky. It had huge wings and a monstrous tail. Then she saw it breath fire. At that moment she saw the scaly face of a dragon.
"A dragon? she whispered, A dragon! a dragon! she screamed."
This not even making a disturbance in the village, she turned to run inside but before she got in, a huge gray dragon swooped down in front of her lightly landing.
"I wish no harm" Sandra said daringly. Her heart started to beat faster as she met the dragons gaze with her own.
"I can see that very clearly in you." said the dragon
She was so astonished that she was speechless.
" Do not be afraid, we are but graceful creatures. Only the Ruby Red are not. said the dragon. My name is Glimmer the star dragon and I wish you to be my friend I am very lonely and I have no one to talk to."
" Why have you come to me. she whispered. I am just a girl."
" No, you have a kind heart." said Glimmer
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For the next few nights, Sandra played with her new found friend.
They were inseparable. One night she was riding on his back and they were heading west. They saw a huge camp set up. Both curios, Glimmer came down closer. Then Sandra saw on the tents a signal of a neighboring castle. Sandra had heard about that castle in town and that castle was very crude and evil. She told Glimmer about it immediately and they flew back to town. She went to her father immediately and woke him up. She told him about what she saw, but he did not listen. Feeling that it was no use she ran to the bell tower in town and pulled the rope with all her might and it rung.
This woke the town up and they lazily climbed out of their beds half asleep.
" Good people she said gathering up her courage. I have seen an army from the west coming to attack us."
The villagers looked at each other in amazement Then started to walk slowly back to their homes.
“Wait!” she screamed unhappily.
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Fine she thought. She called for Glimmer and told him what happened. They left in silence.
The next morning the army came. The town was not ready for it and lots were killed. Glimmer and Sandra returned. They saw what was happening. He dropped Sandra off and he roasted the army. The town was very grateful and Glimmer the Grey and Sandra the kind, they were known throughout history, and forevermore inseparable.

 

Thank you for reading. Please post you're commmets and suggestions here! Thank you! ^-^!

 

It started pretty well, though the ending seems like it was just cut short, or really rushed. Though of course I'm a stickler for detail, but not too much detail. Would've appealed a bit more to me, also, is if a little more back-story was added and character descriptions were blended in with the story itself as opposed to a introduction of sorts. There's a few other things though I gotta think of how to word them, hehe. Though overall, nice job and keep at it.

 

Thank you for Replying. You see you were correct. It was really rushed for it was like nine olclock and my parents wanted me to get in bed. Otherwise I might've written all night.