Creative Writing This is Now

this is now.
this is where i am.
this is where i'm going.
i'm picking up the mess i've made.
i'm sinking into isolation.
i cannot hold on.
i simply just can't bear the pain.

i want to live
i want to die
i wanna go somewhere that'll pacify.

i want the beauty
i want the grace
i've fallen from heaven
i've given the taste of betrayal
i've received nothing but denial

that was then
that was the past
that was the sadness
that was the eternal fantasy

 

i thought that was pretty good. ^__^

... all your poems seem kinda sad-ish... makes me sad... plus, all my fishes in the fish tank are dying... 1st it was one... now it's a lot more...

but really, your poems kinda remind me of my poems. or at least the better ones. lol.

gawd, i love yours.

 

Nice poem. it seems on the sad side but its good in my book.

Also i think u can actually make a song out of this . Think Lincon Park

 

Lol. Almost most of my writtings were song lyrics actually. ^__^
If anyone who is participating in BJP Idol would like to use this, that'd be sweet. Oooh yeah.

 

As usaul your peoms are wonderful Sakuma-San...do you think mine or okay.
I'm thinking about posting some!!

 

I think your poems are good! ^_^ You've got potential! And thanks for the comment!

 

Everyone has potential as long as they have the ambition. Nice poem. Keep it up.

 

Haha. I'm with you on that one. Thanks.

 

Ah. Yes. Lovely. Thoughtful one.