Creative Writing What becomes of snow

Ummmmm....I'm really new here and I have this contest hat I enterd about poetry and I just wanted some feedback about the one I wrote for the contest :blush:

What becomes of snow

You posses darkness, it's your natural trait,
To feel this power is your destined fate.
Your mind is sharp and tainted with black,
The only one you care about is he who bites back.

The taste of blood is your hearts calling,
You feel your soul as it begins falling,
Your memories are filled with hate and deciet,
How have you survived this horendous feat.

You see things no one else may,
Barely keeping insanity at bay,
Your soul twisting in angers flood,
The midnight moon is the color of blood.

You weep in the palms of your empty hands,
Your sorrow enveloping all of your demands,
You didn't choose this it wasn't your choice,
Crying out with that magnificent voice.

Well...was it O.K???I just would apreciate any opinions that I could get (and maybe a better title)

 

Very nice .. i loved it. I really love reading others poetry and hopefully you'll have a lot more I can enjoy.

 

i really liked, alot. can't help you with the title though, most of mine are untitled.

 

I like it. You did it rather well. I am not very good coming up with titles. I did like yours though.

 

i think the title's fine

in fact i really like it

good peom too

 

I didn't see how many people like these poems... WOW!!! Thanx everyone I really appriciate all of you looking at all of the poems I wrote :catgirl: :shy: :anime: :sweat: :glazed: ...